Attendees: FB, CW, JO, DB (New member! Hep!)
Read: Nice Cup of Tea (Andy Van Terheyden rap lyrics); The Quarry & Dark Out (FB short story and short treatment, respectively).
The rap lyrics are for Andy's competition with his brother. Check out supervtbros.co.uk for more information. Anyway, Andy's having to write and record a rap song, and he sent in his lyrics not so that we could change the words, but so that we could brainstorm some potential locations and scripts for the song. So we did that - amazing how many ideas can be thrown up in a short space of time. He gets an email with loads of info from me as feedback.
The Quarry is the story of a man revisiting childhood diaries after a terrible, unspecified accident. In the story, he has chosen one particular episode to re-imagine. It sees something of a conflict between his new perception of the world and his youthful one, alongside an undercurrent of emotions we are not really privy to. Feedback was fantastic: some suggestion of further experimentation with showing some of the protagonist's earlier writing, along with exploring how to represent the intensity of the youthful man's experience through the mouthpiece of a now tired and sickly man. Furthermore, underlying sexual tensions could be easily heightened by some simple, almost cosmetic changes. While an animated ending might appear tangential, it might also prove to contrast nicely with the lack of animation displayed by the narrator. JO said "a good piece of storytelling". Ain't that nice?
Dark Out originated from ideas by Jess Cope (puppeteer and film-maker extraordinaire) in collaboration with me. I've sat on the idea for an age, and finally decided getting some kind of workable draft was worthwhile. It's still early days for this story (a young boy in a post-apocalyptic world refuses to go out, when people around him are convinced it is time to leave the safety of the bunker. His fear of open spaces is essentially his salvation), and there is much more that needs to be added both in terms of the boy's surroundings (narrowness) and personality (shy but with some force), and in the way in which his relationships with Fem and Ohm are emphasised. Again, fantastic feedback from the Faslets left me feeling like the piece was essential moving forwards. A point of particular note: these kids can read. Great reading. Really brought it to life.
Keep commenting. Love to all,
FB
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